篇一
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My school life
七年级翱翔班 蔡鑫雨
This term is over. How is your school life going? Let me tell you my school life.
Class usually starts at 8:00am. and finished at 5:00pm. I have many things to do everyday. I have 10 subjects and I have seven classes every day. My favorite subject is English. It's the 3rd class. And I have lunch in the school.
The classes in the afternoon are interesting. I have P.E., social studies and shop. Many students like these classes very much. And me too.
I'm busy every day, but I'm happy. I like my school life.
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Try to expand on your ideas to make it more comprehensive.Work on enhancing the coherence and cohesion.
篇二:
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My favorite season
七年级翱翔班 白孜谦
There are four seasons in a year, spring, summer, autumn, and winter. Spring is warm. Summer is hot, autumn is cool. And winter is cold. They're all great. But my favorite season is winter.
Mountains in winter is beautiful. They are white and clean. And the air are also clean. You can make a snowman in the outside. And the heavy snow ball fights in the park.
Snow as qualities in winter. The snow is beautiful, It's really let me feel relaxed.
This is my favorite season. What about you?
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The overall structure of this composition is clear, presenting a logical train of thought.There is room for improvement in the accuracy of word usage.
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Keep healthy
七翱翔 杨紫宇
Do you want to be a healthy people? Do you want to stay healthy? Then follow the following tips and do a good job.
Firstly, early to bed and early to rise every day. And the exercise every morning and evening. For example, running,planning basketball and playing football. Secondly, you need to eat a lot of fruits and vegetables. And not be picky about food. Finally, we should be happy everyday.Because smile will make us younger.
Health is important for us. I hope you can be healthy and enjoy your good life.
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The content is relevant and focused, addressing the topic well.You can consider adding some transitional words or phrases to make the text more fluid.
篇三
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My summer holiday
七翱翔 刘雅琳
I have big plans. I will go to Hangzhou in this summer holiday. My summer holiday will be fine.
This summer, my mom,father and I will go on a trip to Hangzhou. It is a very beautiful place. We will go to a lake. I will lie on the beach. I will make many things with the sand!I will make a stand animal. I will play beach volleyball with my parents. After that, I will do my homework and read some books. I will watch TV in the evening, but I will play sports every day.
I like summer holiday. It is cool!
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The development of ideas is clear and easy to follow. The language expression is relatively smooth, with few grammar errors.
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